One day I was walking in the park and found a pair of mammoth footprints. I went home and told my big brother he said “ya know how you seen that bigfoot foot” “no he doesn’t actually have big feet” I interrupted, I saw the movie when I was 10. I went down to tell my adventures dad. He went to the park with me to have look. SUDDENLY a monkey to big to be a gorilla attacked my dad! but he whacked it IT WAS BIGFOOT!! There`s bite on dad’s shoulder (dun dun dun)!
One dark and stormy night a boy and his friend were walking and saw A creepy looking house on top of the tall steep hill. And strangely they decided to walk to it and go inside of the house. When they slowly walked up to the gate there was a sign that said DANGER in big words. They ignored the sign and carefully they climbed over the gates. They started to walk fast when approaching the doors. When they got to the doors they went inside, and the doors behind them slammed shut. They walked to the center of the house. It was really bright but then suddenly it went dark!
As I gazed across the beach I sore I seal laying on some seaweed and just, laughing. I stared thought why is he laughing what made him laugh? So I went up to it and poked it.
“Hey why did you poke me?!” said the seal. I was SO shocked because the seal just talked to me.
“Um, sorry i was just wondering why you were laughing?” I asked.
“Because my friend ratty is tickling me!”
“Hey!” Yelled the rat. I thought it was really weird that a rat and a seal could talk so I slowly, walked away back home.
My goal is to use more punctuation I dont really use this or just use it at bad times so I think I should work on that.
“Mmm. What is that smell? It smells so good.” Asked Steve.
“Oh um it’s just my burger.” replied Dan.
“Whats in it?” asked Steve.
“Nothing.” said Dan
“TELL ME NOW!”yelled Steve.
“Ok you dont have to scream theres: a meat patty, lettuce, tomatos, tomato sauce,and cheese.” said Dan.
Steve was drulling when he looked at and he wanted it so bad.
“Can I have it?” asked Steve.
“NO!” yelled Dan.
Steve thought there was no other way to get it but by force.
“GIVE IT TO ME!” Yelled Steve. So after they were punching and kicking each other the winner was their dad who came to the kitchen and ate the burger.
“OK i’m going to do it!” I said to my friend. “3,2,1 i’m walking into the wall.” Instead of walking into it I walked through it. I couldn’t believe at first but I pinched myself and it wasn’t a dream because I didn’t wake up.
“Excuse me police were am I-” They pulled their guns out and I thought, Why are they pulling their guns out?
“Sir we’ve found he prisoner!”Said the “police” through the walkie talkie.
“Are you police?” I asked.
“Nope. Well yes and no we’re bad cops.”
“what’s that supposed to mean?”
“We sometimes just arrest people for fun.” they replied “But your are a prisoner.”
TO BE CONTINUED!
When Joe jumped into the water he stayed under water for 5 seconds, he got out of the water and as he stared into the water it began to turn green. People started turning green the whole place started turning green and he was freaking out! He got out of the water and he stared at everyone and thought, why are there so many weirdos everywhere what’s happening to everyone and everything? He ran outside and everything was the same but the weirdos pulled him back. Joe ran and they all yelled stop running! He didn’t listen and he fell in the pool and drowned.
Goal: My goal was to make my story mostly a narrative and use punctuation more often.
“I have the sunshine,Ice, Frightened, Purple, Flew. What is that.” Said Joe.
“It’s just a normal flu, but with a different name.” said the doctor. The boy was in bed for 1 month and was bored. All he did was watch TV. He waited until he was feeling better but while he was waiting he turned to ice and then purple .After a while he was feeling better and wanted to go outside but when he went outside he turned purple and felt sick again. After 1 more month he went to the doctor and and he said he could go outside and do stuff a normal kid would do.
It was year 2015 and were no people from the old west around but someone was a cowboy and was dangerous.
“Who is that guy why is here?” Asked John.
“I don’t know he must be in a costume.” Replied Peter. They walked up to him and said.
“Where are you from.” they both said at the same time.
“I’m from the old west and I would win every dull I was in.” Said the strange man. People would here gun shots in his house and people were scared. After 10 days he said to everyone that he was living and everyone was so happy that he was gone.
As the flame flicked then went out they wondered who started the fire and where he or she was.
“Do any of you guys know who started the fire?”asked John.
“Not a clue.”They all replied.
“Then we have to track him down find him and ask him questions.”said John. They searched for clues and found a address.
“Hm where’s this go to?” asked Bob.
“I don’t know let’s go to it.” replied Joe. When they got to the address they knocked on the door and asked alot of questions.
“Fine I set the fire” said the man. So they called the cops.
“Hey Mitch, and Mike come here we need to make a plan.” whispered Tom.
“I know what to do can do a SURPRISE ATTACK.”Yelled Mike.
“Yes great idea.” said Mitch. They planned for hours and decided to do a surprise attack.
“Where are they gonna be?” asked Mike.
“In your front yard.” replied Tom.
“Nooo. They better not touch the gnomes.” They were all going to Mike’s front yard and when they got there, there were so many ninjas waiting for them.
“Ok we go in soon when they’re not looking. Shhh ok on three 1,2,3 silence,orange thunder,pyjamas swarm!”