100WC: Parallel

“OK i’m going to do it!” I said to my friend. “3,2,1 i’m walking into the wall.” Instead of walking into it I walked through it. I couldn’t believe at first but I pinched myself and it wasn’t a dream because I didn’t wake up.

 

“Excuse me police were am I-” They pulled their guns out and I thought, Why are they pulling their guns out?

“Sir we’ve found he prisoner!”Said the “police” through the walkie talkie.

“Are you police?” I asked.

“Nope. Well yes and no we’re bad cops.”

“what’s that supposed to mean?”

“We sometimes just arrest people for fun.” they replied  “But your are a prisoner.”

TO BE CONTINUED!

3 thoughts on “100WC: Parallel

  1. Jake,
    this is an awesome piece!
    I thought it was a fantastic idea that you revealed step by step. The idea of that wall being a way to imprison people is cool. I really like the way you have used dialogue to push the explanation of events forward. And you have been really careful to set out your dialogue including careful punctuation.
    Well done!
    Ant

  2. I though this was really good Jake. I liked how you put to be continued at the end.
    Can’t wait for the sequel.

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